[Writingworkshop] And?

[Neale Morison]

I like this one. There's a kind of onward Christian soldiers tone - 
forward to victory. The from is good. This one has a nice shifting 
rhythm and the from adds to it. I don't know if you do this on purpose 
but you always seem to break out of the rhythm on the last line.

There was a young man of Japan
Whose limericks never would scan
When asked why this was
He replied, "'Tis because
I always try to fit as many syllables into the last line as I possibly can."

Thanks for noticing Kernaghan and Strunk. Really the whole thing was an 
excuse to do that. I've got a touch up too.

And?

2009-02-08

Hot and Itchy
Day and Night
Kernaghan and Ritchie
Strunk and White

Fantasy and Horror
Old and New
Sodom and Gomorrah
Black and Blue

Fun and Flirty
Sweet and Soft
Down and Dirty
Time and Oft

Rough and Ready
Young and Strong
Slow and Steady
Loud and Long

Airs and Graces
Good and Right
Belt and Braces
Stand and Fight

Old and Rusty
Hard and Fast
Damp and Musty
First and Last

Form and Function
Tried and True
Con and Junction
Me and You


Daniel Peters wrote:
> fuck.  already see a fix.
>  
>  
> come with the thunder
> /from /under whatever /you're/ hiding
> where were you when
> who you were mattered
> only cause
> just because
> please don't suppose
> there is no way to find the way
> that finds the way you /want/ to be
>  
> maybe.  sticking over the "from"
>
>
>  
> On Sat, Feb 7, 2009 at 6:15 PM, Daniel Peters <danieltpeters at gmail.com 
> <mailto:danieltpeters at gmail.com>> wrote:
>
>     come with the thunder
>     under whatever your hiding
>     where were you when
>     who you were mattered
>     only cause
>     just because
>     please don't suppose
>     there is no way to find the way
>     that finds the way you need to be
>      
>      
>     Love the K and R strunk and white reference.  Solid. 
>
>     On Thu, Feb 5, 2009 at 4:57 AM, Neale Morison
>     <neale at nealemorison.com <mailto:neale at nealemorison.com>> wrote:
>
>         And?
>         2009-02-05
>
>         Down and Dirty
>         Day and Night
>         Kernaghan and Ritchie
>         Strunk and White
>
>         Gone and Forgotten
>         Today and Tomorrah
>         Woodward and Bernstein
>         Sodom and Gomorrah
>
>         Crime and Punishment
>         Form and Function
>         Old and Grey
>         Con and Junction
>
>         Astaire and Rogers
>         Shake and Shiver
>         King and Country
>         Stand and Deliver
>
>         Belt and Braces
>         Old and New
>         Airs and Graces
>         Me and You
>
>
>         -- 
>         Neale Morison
>         neale at nealemorison.com <mailto:neale at nealemorison.com>
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>         +61 417 661 427
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Neale Morison
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