[Writingworkshop] Stories

[Christopher Robichaud]

Hey Neale,

Thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked it. This was a hard one to write,
but was rewarding all the same. And I'll think on how to go about making
less of the world explicit at the end. It's tough, because at that point the
reader certainly knows more than Neb, but it's Neb's POV we're still in.
It's always a balancing act between giving away too much and too little.
I'll think about how to strike a finer balance. I do appreciate the
feedback, and again, I'm really happy you enjoyed it. Thanks!

-Chris

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[mailto:writingworkshop-bounces at nealemorison.org] On Behalf Of Neale Morison
Sent: Friday, February 29, 2008 2:49 PM
To: Neale's Writing Workshop
Subject: Re: [Writingworkshop] Stories

Hi Chris.
I just read Divine Comedy. Very nice. I really liked it. I love the 
quality of the first person narrative, and the way you establish that he 
thinks there is something wrong with him and genuinely wants to be like 
normal people. The story flows beautifully. The tree he gets up is a 
great tree, and then you throw excellent rocks at him and get him down 
again. The revelation at the end was great, but in a way a lot of it is 
clear by that time anyway. I wonder if there's isn't a way to give the 
reader a little more credit for figuring out what the reader can figure 
out, and only make explicit the rest. It's not a big deal anyway, it's 
just the only mild criticism I had. Very nice story. That's one in the 
eye for them goddam Sade-ists. I was particularly impressed with the 
elaborate care you have taken to provide a platform for some of the 
oldest jokes ever told.
Well done,
Neale
Christopher Robichaud wrote:
>
> Hey all!
>
> Attached are two stories I'll be using for writing program 
> applications and eventually to send out for publication. They've 
> already been workshopped in Joe's classes over the years and had 
> several other eyes look at them, but I appreciate all feedback! If you 
> get the chance, please give 'em a look and lemme know what you think.
>
> Thanks!
>
> -Chris
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