[Writingworkshop] Hate Crime draft 2

[Neale Morison]

It's a subtle change, Antony: cannot -> do not.
Do you think it's enough to drag it over the line?

Antony Nigel Donovan wrote:
> On Sun, 2008-04-13 at 12:17 -0400, Neale Morison wrote:
>   
>> I went back to the original images from the story of the starving dog in 
>> the art gallery, I took out the worst of the Dr Seuss on acid, and I 
>> gave the psychotic stalker terrorist more of a God complex. Is this any 
>> better?
>>
>> 2008-04-12
>>
>> Look at you sipping your chilled Chardonnay,
>> Chattering cheerfully, nothing to say,
>> Glorified, gratified, satisfied, smug,
>> Snug as a bug in a rug on a drug.
>>
>> Look at your eyes disconnect from your brain,
>> As you gaze unimpressed at a creature in pain,
>> Look at your brain disconnect from your heart,
>> As you glide through a gallery calling it art.
>>
>> Look at your manicure, look at your hair,
>> Nothing can touch you and teach you to care,
>> Nothing can open your eyes to the light,
>> To the fright of the sight of the plight of the night.
>>
>> When will you wake to the world you destroyed,
>> To the horror that yawns in the depths of the void?
>> Nothing can pierce through your passionproof skin,
>> To the moistness and softness and pinkness within.
>>
>> Look in the mirror. A glimpse of a face,
>> A flash of a fear of a frozen embrace,
>> What is the fate you are failing to flee?
>> You see your reflection; you cannot see me.
>>     
>
> You see your reflection;  you do no see me.
>
>   
>> Cloaked in a cloud, camouflaged and concealed,
>> I am the reckoning, rarely revealed,
>> I am the terror that mangles your mind,
>> I am the footsteps that echo behind.
>>
>>     
>
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